Editorial Report

Both of my Editorial Reports (a) & (b) [selections can be found by clicking links] can be found here... More revision, more blog posts, more work, more reading, here you go. 

Rough Cut:

Re-edited:

1. My content changed when I re-edited it in regards to grammatical, punctuation, and citation errors. I revamped the mechanics of the essay to sharpen its corners in every aspect. 

2. The form changed in that because of the insertion of punctuation and citation the writing became more succinct and sentences became shorter with more interruptions which provides clarity but may have indirectly hindered the flow. We will see what Sean thinks as I am interested to find that happy medium between clarity and choppy.