Local Revision: Passive and Active Voice

changed

is

is

became

became

took

sued

concealing

forked

promises

was

was

discovered

passed

had

possess

concealed

overwhelmed

evade

is

cost

collapse

wants

employs

built

providing

standing

is

holds

attempting

evade

proved

sued

stated

has

made

is

is

found

defines

risk

perceive

presides

are

grouped

pitted

can
save
will
be
compensated
play
are
are
are
operating
was
has
taken
preserve
achieved
hiring
ensure
are
joining
are
leading
is
conducted
is
working
hindered
eliciting
have
become
entailing
playing
brought
hear
play
claims
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1. Something I would have disregarded had it not been for this breakdown, the use of specific powerful active specific verbs, or lack thereof, is what is making or breaking m piece. Most of my used verbs are vague, and some hints of passiveness are assimilated but I believe they are essential to the flow of the piece.

2. My use of verbs could be improved overall in the project by making the vague words more specific. I did in some instances but was lazier in others. Simply changing the verb became to acclimated to would enhance the flow and power of the postmortem of the controversy